(WIP) Destiny aurelia martinez

[gemma84]

LADIES AND GENTLEMEN,
MAY I INTRODUCE

Destiny [/color][/size]aureliamartinez
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you can choose your friends but you cant choose your relatives
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Me in a Nutshell

Characters full name: Destiny aurelia martinez
Nicknames: none
Age & birthdate: 23
Gender: female
Affiliation: X-men
Sexuality: Straight
Face Claim: angelina jolie

How I look Now

Hair: Destiny has long, brown hair and she allways wears it down. except when she is working out, then its in a bun just like her sister.
Eyes: she has hazel eyes
Look Description her height is 5'7 and her weight is a nice 120 lbs.
Done it Myself: Savannah has a tattoo on her lower back of a brotherhood symbol she got when she was there.
It just Happened: some scars she has when she useto get abused

More in Depth?

Personality: Destiny is the conplete opposite of Savannah which is shy, quiet, keeps to herself, very friendly, major goody goody ect.
Mom’s name: bianca
Dad’s name: unknown
Siblings names: Savannah
Other important relatives: none

What I can Do and Can't

Powers:Electric generation, manipulation and transportation
Abilities: hand to hand combat and sword/knives.
Weaknesses: water

What Happened to Me

bella vadaloa was born and raised in san fransisco to a mother who was never there and her sister mia looked after her for 2 years until thay got taken from thair mother and put in an orphanige. bella was 5 and mia was 7 when thay got adopted into what everyone thought was a good home but both bella and mia got phisicly, mentally and sexually abused nearly every night by the "father" of the house. one day mia had had enough of being abused so she desided to run away and bella had the same idea because thay always stuck together,,bella was 13 and mia was 15, thay both lived on the streets for 2 years until thay joined the brotherhood and magneto treated them like daughters, teaching them how to fight and look after themselves, this went on for another 2 years until one day thay upset him and he threw them out and thay found xaviers school.

The very Real you

your name: Gemma
your age: 25
experience: 15+
contact: PM or e-mail
how you found us: exstintion
writing sample:

[Gambit]

I'll tell you a few things now, before Wolvie even gets to you.

First off, there's only one character per account. Cloak and Dagger are exempt from this rule because the two of them are always a pair, rarely a single. You, however, are not. So if you would like to keep both of these characters, you need two accounts. And you should have your first one accepted before you think of making your second. Capishe?

Second, I know your title says "WIP" or "Almost Done," but you need a lot more than what you have in most categories. It might also do you well to use proper capitalization at all times. For the filling, you need at least three decent paragraphs for personality. You don't even have one decent paragraph. In my world, a decent paragraph is of five sentences or more. And let's say, for now, my world is the only one that exists, right? Also, do not mention your other character in your personality at all.

Give your powers much, much more filler than they have already. Electrical manipulation? How does that work? Does she have to be touching the electronic? Or . . . I don't really get a good feel as to what your character can do. Gotta fix that if you want to role play her. And that doesn't just stop at this character. If you want the other accepted as well, you want to go in-depth with her personality.

History: Proper capitalization. Good grammar. And as for what needs to be there, I'll just quote what Wolvie has on the Bio Template, because she worded it quite well, if you ask me.

three or more decent paragraphs about your characters history. please go into depth. how did they come by these illnesses? stress? genetics? have they been treated before? how did that work out?

Decent is a word used again. So fifteen sentences should not be that hard to come up with.

Last, I'd like to point out that your account must be the name of your character, whether it be the character's code name, like Gambit, or real name, like Victor Creed. Your own pet name is not accepted as a name.

I don't want to sound rude, because in general I'm really not. I'm just blunt and straight to the point. So I'll just get to what I have been thinking: You've been role playing for ten years (I assume 15 plus means age fifteen and up)? I'm sorry, but with your bio it doesn't really show, and you don't even have a writing sample yet. You can step up. Everyone's capable of doing it.

Now I'll end my little--pfft, little--rant/critique and go on my way and leave you to your own. This is just my opinion, and I'm a mod with no power over the bios. You want to stay here, you get to deal with Raven and Wolvie. Luck to you.

[Wolverine]

Ok... Gambit...

-holds out banner-

But to the wrong person. Gemma here explained to me she is unable to type more because of difficulties which I will explain after I have cleared with her to be ok. So... she gets to do a bit less than 3 paragraphs. I do give you clearance on the rant about two characrers in one account tho.

[gemma84]

ok gambit firstly was it absolutely necessary to be THAT rude and patronizing? you could have just said all that in a nice manner and not talk to me like I'm stupid, as wolverine said i did contact her before i did anything and she said i may have as many characters as i could handle but i didn't know i needed two accounts so I'm sorry about that. My characters are close sisters so why does it matter if i mention my other character, destiny in savannah's personality when they are related and there is a question in the bio for siblings? I'm sorry but again i didn't think it would be that big of a deal. Now, about destiny's power...its just another name for electrokenisis...meaning she can generate, manipulate and travel by electricity I'm sorry but i don't know how else to explain it. again i did explain why i cant type millions of paragraphs...i fully admit I'm crap at spelling, grammar and proper capitalization but i really am trying but when you cant go to school its very hard plus i don't do it on purpose. as you can see i have changed my account name now. I'm not going to talk to you with such disrespect as you have done to me because i believe you should treat people as you would like to be treated so I'm stopping now before i start anything so bye.

[Wolverine]

OK.... And for lying to the admin putting up a sad sob story and now snapping at a mod

Banned from this forum as of now.

[Wolverine]